Tuesday, January 4, 2011

Break Free




Break Free

It doesn’t have to be this way
You know it doesn’t
We can unclamp
The vice of our
Grandmothers’ voices
You can take that hand
Gripping my arm
Loosen the fingers
Cup my cheek
Softly softly.
What is real?
That hereditary hunger
Our middle class manners
The golden rule
The hand that cups my cheek
My hand, that softly brushes
The hair from your eyes.

 
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27 comments:

  1. I am enjoying all the posts that I have read so far on this prompt! I like the image of freeing ourselves from middle class values - if only ...

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  2. Nice view! thanks- good post and poem.

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  3. I love the line about our grandmother's voices. Wow!

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  4. We can unclamp
    The vice of our
    Grandmothers’ voices

    Oh, yes!

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  5. Wow, this is deep. Well done!

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  6. Lovely piece, I was going to pick out the same extract as Jinksy, lovely phrasing.

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  7. Excellent take on the Magpie. It's amazing how many different takes there are.
    I prefer the succinct ones like yours to long stories.

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  8. I like the way this becomes free, so tender..well done!

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  9. Your poems always seem to catch me right where I am and then transport me to some place wholly new.

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  10. Dear The Bug,
    This is beautiful.
    Ann T.

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  11. If only freeing was that easy...

    Here is my magpie:
    a wheel barrow

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  12. Beautiful writing.

    I must say I love your header photo too. :-)

    Paul

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  13. Beautiful piece, unclamping voices of those before us. Sensitive, heartfelt.

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  14. Very nice. And speaks to us all.

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  15. love the message in it.
    well put,

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  16. Dear Bug
    Yes we can ignore those ancestral voices

    but they whisper on.......
    happy new year

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  17. Just why is it my grandmother's voice was like a vice? Could it be I knew she was wise (and right).. and I wasn't ready to admit it?

    Nice Magpie!!

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  18. A sharp and focussed take on the soft tyranny of the family. This works so well.

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  19. Deep indeed! I too like the vice of grandmother's voice.

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  20. Interesting concept - considerable depth in the words about learned behaviours and nature versus nurture. Love it!

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