tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post3198396386739372147..comments2024-03-28T16:02:34.249-04:00Comments on Bug's Eye View: The Poetry Bus - Land of ConfusionThe Bughttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07509037206264761261noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-3263152835091537942010-07-28T15:15:10.537-04:002010-07-28T15:15:10.537-04:00"Excuse me while I withrawin confusion...&quo..."Excuse me while I withrawin confusion..." what a great phrase - must use that the next gaffe I make.Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-26792360334781894402010-07-27T16:03:48.366-04:002010-07-27T16:03:48.366-04:00I particularly liked the fisrt verse - that sort o...I particularly liked the fisrt verse - that sort of confusion, where you are so stunned you find yourself being polite, when you should probably be hitting and spitting!<br /><br />Goodness, would hate to see any of my college poetry - not a patch on this. Well done!Domestic Oubhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17298706907126418711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-65265054314845268532010-07-27T15:29:00.349-04:002010-07-27T15:29:00.349-04:00Rain hitting your window, distorting your view ......Rain hitting your window, distorting your view ... I love those words!Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-91598736206311436122010-07-27T13:44:58.270-04:002010-07-27T13:44:58.270-04:00Dana, I like the image of looking out a window wit...Dana, I like the image of looking out a window with 'wavering colors.' Nothing like staring out onto a rainy day to merge vision and thoughts which cause the tears to flow.Dr. Jeanne Irishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11277286531162894465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-51358034862354333632010-07-27T07:41:37.071-04:002010-07-27T07:41:37.071-04:00Nicely understated, this feels very 'true'...Nicely understated, this feels very 'true' in its expression - the restraint in the language, pace and structure feel very appropriate to the withdrawal - yet enhancing the sincerity and severity of the inner hurt. Well done.Padhraig Nolanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11010869074911253314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-5943575278254127382010-07-27T05:19:04.228-04:002010-07-27T05:19:04.228-04:00those teenage angsty things are a delight aren'...those teenage angsty things are a delight aren't they!.. there's something really simple in this poem that makes it really get to the point.. cool!<br />by the way, that 'willie died in the morning' poem and picture is so moving..Batteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-57811051700372314912010-07-26T14:38:42.276-04:002010-07-26T14:38:42.276-04:00Where the rain hits the window - like that a great...Where the rain hits the window - like that a great deal - sort of pathetic fallacy for the mind.<br /><br />KatKat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-9277364084241391782010-07-26T13:58:11.381-04:002010-07-26T13:58:11.381-04:00Wow, Bug, I am astonished that this is an unearthe...Wow, Bug, I am astonished that this is an unearthed gem from way back. I too like the restraint, and the maturity, and I'd highlight the section Niamh has - beautiful lines.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-14229168380093990612010-07-26T12:11:51.175-04:002010-07-26T12:11:51.175-04:00Bravo! You must have been delighted to unearth thi...Bravo! You must have been delighted to unearth this, after all that time, some really lovely lines in it.<br /><br />Vibrant colors<br />waver.<br />The world is<br />washed deep.<br /><br />gorgeousNiamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-11831875828727847392010-07-26T07:31:26.686-04:002010-07-26T07:31:26.686-04:00Attagirl!
What a deep drawn confusion...
nicely wr...Attagirl!<br />What a deep drawn confusion...<br />nicely written:)<br />~CheersErratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-20091660559315945092010-07-26T00:28:03.334-04:002010-07-26T00:28:03.334-04:00So angst-filled, but so lovely. Nice.So angst-filled, but so lovely. Nice.Kimberly Masonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01393537529349019301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-22114112584459143212010-07-25T20:43:33.158-04:002010-07-25T20:43:33.158-04:00This says something about how we all feel at times...This says something about how we all feel at times. I liked it!Brendahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04373560689980768576noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-45883749705868876862010-07-25T17:43:00.777-04:002010-07-25T17:43:00.777-04:00I see a part of myself in your words. Great poem.I see a part of myself in your words. Great poem.Katyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02610117543051640146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-25538808156124433792010-07-25T15:27:24.110-04:002010-07-25T15:27:24.110-04:00How very contrite you managed to sound...How very contrite you managed to sound...Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-23745908420150175602010-07-25T15:18:51.644-04:002010-07-25T15:18:51.644-04:00Wonderful poem, Bug! My college material is far le...Wonderful poem, Bug! My college material is far less controlled. You have gift.Enchanted Oakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14815997287116818456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-78435095698207240092010-07-25T14:20:39.511-04:002010-07-25T14:20:39.511-04:00Considering how young you must have been when you ...Considering how young you must have been when you wrote it, this poem shows a real sureness of touch. Very nicely done and not ovrestated.Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-59743533151538043662010-07-25T14:05:13.692-04:002010-07-25T14:05:13.692-04:00I found this very sad
"I thought I knew you.
...I found this very sad<br />"I thought I knew you.<br />I thought I knew me."<br /><br />"Where the rain<br />hits the window<br />my view<br />is distorted"<br />This is such a striking imageAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08915236568015079389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-2011533750765621652010-07-25T13:20:05.767-04:002010-07-25T13:20:05.767-04:00I would have expected that this is a more recent p...I would have expected that this is a more recent poem, such mature observations, to beautifully rendered! :-)Merisihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16781937797213521146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-56088743080194520652010-07-25T12:47:42.329-04:002010-07-25T12:47:42.329-04:00Oh, my goodness, I have felt exactly this way at t...Oh, my goodness, I have felt exactly this way at times. Confusion.<br /><br />You have a way with words.Johttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03382221688268676914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-79120934674848610252010-07-25T12:02:31.568-04:002010-07-25T12:02:31.568-04:00love confusion aptly captured in few words. Nice w...love confusion aptly captured in few words. Nice work!Shilpahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06721267324353294160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2686754906089902443.post-36644714109060946252010-07-25T09:40:18.343-04:002010-07-25T09:40:18.343-04:00Hi there, I really like this - your use of repetit...Hi there, I really like this - your use of repetition in each stanza works really well. It is succinct, precise and the tone is very restrained and controlled. I particularly like - 'I thought I knew you./I thought I knew me.'Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com