Thursday, September 2, 2010

Magpie #30



Absently I take a bite.
I’m not really
Paying attention
Not really tasting
That tart enticement
In just such an
Offhand way
I lose my innocence




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26 comments:

  1. I always enjoy what you write, but I must say this is one of my favorites.
    You convey a strong message in a few words, very clever and witty, and perhaps a bit wry.
    Joanny

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  2. Funny what happens when we're not paying attention. Nice work, Bug!

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  3. hee hee! What a great surprise at the end of your Magpie. Tasty little twist!

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  4. Some of the best statments are made with few words. Thanks Dana!

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  5. allusion to the biblical Eve. this is little jewel of defense. very womanly.

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  6. Way too easy to lose your innocence ... nicely done!

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  7. Nice one Bug! Why d'you think you write when you can WRITE.

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  8. Age and the loss of youth is not something that we anticipate, it happens, of course, without us even realising. The strange nature of time. Wonderful magpie, Dana :)

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  9. Thanks everyone. I actually thought about taking the poem down this morning because I decided it was such a cliche.

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  10. How nice! I think a lot of ladies could relate to this one.

    Teresa

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  11. That's sure to happen when you don't pay attention :) Nice one.

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  12. i imagine out inattention heaps lots of trouble on us...nice write!

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  13. It wasn't cliche, it was very good! You use such few words to express so much - wonderfully written!

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  14. We must pay attention, or we'll miss all the good stuff! But not you, for sure!

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  15. I can just imagine Eve saying this. Perfect.

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  16. Who knew innocence could be so easily lost?! lol

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  17. aha, that's a great way to let it go!

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  18. aahh.. temptation!!
    All you wish to do really, is to give in to it! Not really enjoy it.. :)

    Well said!!!

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