Sunday, March 28, 2010

Magpie Tales - Week Seven


It's time again for Willow's Magpie Tales. Each week she posts a prompt around which a tale should be formed. Click the link above to see other offerings.


Girl With a Yellow Flower

Standing on the corner
Knots ravel & unravel
Frayed twine twisting
I am a hot mess

Everyone who passes
Could be or not be
Endless and final stop
That sly sideways glance

No one approaches
And, weary,
I drop the daffodil
From my fingers

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22 comments:

  1. Tess KincaidMarch 28, 2010 at 4:14 PM

    Oh, gosh, I am always a hot mess.

    Sad, your daffodil girl was stood up.

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  2. ArgentMarch 28, 2010 at 5:16 PM

    This was a lovely neat, poignant poem. I like the phrase "hot mess", might have to steal...

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  3. Kimberly MasonMarch 28, 2010 at 5:41 PM

    I likeeee very much! You painted a very clear, very poetical picture!

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  4. HausfrauMarch 29, 2010 at 7:48 AM

    Oh, I can just see her! Funny, I thought of something besides being stood up--waiting by the side of the road? Ahem.

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  5. AnonymousMarch 29, 2010 at 10:56 AM

    So bright a flower/wonderful poem
    and the story just a tinge sad!

    you got the prize for saying the sky in my post the other day!
    email me
    elizabethwix@hotmail.com
    so I can get it to you!

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  6. Jan of Thousand AcresMarch 29, 2010 at 11:19 AM

    Lovely poem, bittersweet.

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  7. KrunalMarch 29, 2010 at 12:28 PM

    so sad...i wish i could approach her

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  8. christineMarch 29, 2010 at 2:35 PM

    Bittersweet indeed, poor love to be left standing.

    Christine

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  9. Eric S.March 29, 2010 at 9:58 PM

    "That sly sideways glance" I bet, with a bit of angst added in. Lovely poem.

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  10. LisaMarch 29, 2010 at 10:14 PM

    this one did not work out, but the girl in the poem was meant for someone better, someone who could appreciate her inner beauty and love her insides more than her outsides. :)

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  11. CatalystMarch 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM

    Nicely done, short and succinct.

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  12. AnonymousMarch 30, 2010 at 8:04 AM

    Great poem... and have to agree with the others about 'hot mess'!!

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  13. Enchanted OakMarch 30, 2010 at 9:37 AM

    You got the brass ring with "I am a hot mess"! This is a wonderful poem.
    Magpie Daffodil

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  14. AnonymousMarch 30, 2010 at 10:30 AM

    I visualized her standing there, a hot mess indeed. Beautiful photo of a daffodil. One of my favorite flowers.

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  15. Angie MuresanMarch 30, 2010 at 3:38 PM

    I was going to say I like the hot mess bit, yet see everybody's beat me to it. Love the imagery.

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  16. LynMarch 30, 2010 at 4:40 PM

    Don't worry Daffodil girl..the best is yet to be!!

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  17. Vicki LaneMarch 30, 2010 at 5:30 PM

    Could be or not be -- excellent! And the hot mess, as most have mentioned, is brilliant.

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  18. Peter GouldingMarch 30, 2010 at 5:32 PM

    I'd have given you more than a sideways glance Bug, you old heartstring-tugger, you!

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  19. steviewrenMarch 30, 2010 at 5:45 PM

    Nice juxtaposition...a hot mess and the cool beauty of the daffodil.

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  20. Steve CapelinMarch 31, 2010 at 7:23 AM

    A customer any customer. Poor girl. Do daffodils carry special meaning on the street in the USA?

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  21. Brian MillerMarch 31, 2010 at 7:00 PM

    beautifully ...so sorry for her...

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  22. spacedlawApril 1, 2010 at 8:37 AM

    Poor thing.

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