Tomorrow is Poem in Your Pocket day. You can read about it here. Rather than pick a
favorite poem to carry around I decided to write my own. I’m trying a new form,
the TriCube, created by Phillip Larrea. Basically there are three stanzas with
three lines each, with each line containing three syllables. You can read about
Phillip & some (much better!) examples of the TriCube form here.
My first one, inspired by what’s happening outside our house right now:
All that rain
washing clean
washed away.
Memory
blurring with
rivulets.
Words in pools
at my feet
wanting boots.
And this one – aimed at Mike – ha!
Behind me
I hear your
fingers tap -
Words will fly
across space
to some friend
Close the lid!
Shut it down!
Kiss my face!
Great TriCubes! Love Your Posts!
ReplyDeleteSo glad you did this! yay!
ReplyDeleteI'm not familiar with this form of poetry, but it's quite interesting. You seem to have mastered it very well.
ReplyDeleteNow I sit here wondering if the first one really said what I think it said and chuckling about the second one because I actually understood it. Human has never been strong on understanding clever poetry - lol
ReplyDeleteInteresting! I've never heard of a tri-cube, but it sounds like a fun challenge. Yours turned out really well! I like the words wanting boots.
ReplyDeleteOh wait -- I guess YOU want the boots because the words are pooled at your feet. Duh!
ReplyDeleteNice ! fun and cheerful, thanks.
ReplyDeleteanother sort of haiku, just right for the magnetic poetry kit.
ReplyDeleteI loved them! Both create such nice images.
ReplyDeleteBoth are wonderful! Fear not! Your words did not drown.
ReplyDeleteI like the one to Mike! SO CUTE!
ReplyDeleteI like both of those!
ReplyDeleteHave I missed the day itself?
Lovely Form - particularly like the last line! So simple and imperitive!
ReplyDelete"Kiss my face"! Love the wildness of that line.
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smiles...both of these are fun..hopefully your feet did not get too wet for the first one...
ReplyDeleteand you got your kiss in the second...smiles.
Yes, I like them both too especially the kissing one:)
ReplyDeleteI surely did like them both - but I laughed out loud at the second. It's a neat form, and you did well.
ReplyDeleteNot only that, this kind of poem would fit nicely in a pocket.