Wednesday, April 25, 2012

A Poem (or two) in My Pocket


Tomorrow is Poem in Your Pocket day. You can read about it here. Rather than pick a favorite poem to carry around I decided to write my own. I’m trying a new form, the TriCube, created by Phillip Larrea. Basically there are three stanzas with three lines each, with each line containing three syllables. You can read about Phillip & some (much better!) examples of the TriCube form here.

My first one, inspired by what’s happening outside our house right now:

All that rain
 washing clean
  washed away.

Memory
 blurring with
  rivulets.

Words in pools
 at my feet
  wanting boots.


And this one – aimed at Mike – ha!

  Behind me
I hear your
  fingers tap -

  Words will fly
across space
  to some friend

  Close the lid!
Shut it down!
  Kiss my face!

17 comments:

  1. Great TriCubes! Love Your Posts!

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  2. I'm not familiar with this form of poetry, but it's quite interesting. You seem to have mastered it very well.

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  3. Now I sit here wondering if the first one really said what I think it said and chuckling about the second one because I actually understood it. Human has never been strong on understanding clever poetry - lol

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  4. Interesting! I've never heard of a tri-cube, but it sounds like a fun challenge. Yours turned out really well! I like the words wanting boots.

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  5. Oh wait -- I guess YOU want the boots because the words are pooled at your feet. Duh!

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  6. Nice ! fun and cheerful, thanks.

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  7. another sort of haiku, just right for the magnetic poetry kit.

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  8. I loved them! Both create such nice images.

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  9. Both are wonderful! Fear not! Your words did not drown.

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  10. I like both of those!

    Have I missed the day itself?

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  11. Lovely Form - particularly like the last line! So simple and imperitive!

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  12. "Kiss my face"! Love the wildness of that line.
    x

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  13. smiles...both of these are fun..hopefully your feet did not get too wet for the first one...


    and you got your kiss in the second...smiles.

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  14. Yes, I like them both too especially the kissing one:)

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  15. I surely did like them both - but I laughed out loud at the second. It's a neat form, and you did well.

    Not only that, this kind of poem would fit nicely in a pocket.

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