Fire water filled that hole
in their hearts
the way chocolate
ignites mine.
Did they drink
to forget that
pale rape
of Eden?
Do I savor
this dark manna
to forget that
I am not here?
What can extinguish
the demons in the water
and the chocolate?
Pull the pin and see.
Pull the pin ... indeed. A dark and delicious Magpie!!
ReplyDeleteDid they drink
ReplyDeleteto forget that
pale rape
of Eden?
Rich, dark and deep
Witty ending. :)
ReplyDeleteDear The Bug,
ReplyDeleteI love what you do with these memes and tropes. You just keep going and going, higher and higher, with more range and striking power.
When that inner voice is talking to you and putting words in your head, outside of anyone else's meme, start writing immediately! You might already be doing this, but if not, I am here to say that You Are Ready.
Pull the pin,
Have a great picnic today!
xo,
Ann T.
Cocoa ignitions. My favourite kind. Nice read!
ReplyDeleteMmmmmm....Dark Manna. I bet it comes in gold foil with an ivory and maroon paper wrapper.
ReplyDeleteYummy! Good one, Bug!
ReplyDeleteDear Bug: What happens when we pull the plug? Shall we...:) Got to now! Love chocolate and water...not sure about water...give me just chocolate and milk! This is undoubtedly a French confection? EXcellent! "pale rape of Eden"? Very poetic inference!Is this Biblical? Let's hope so! jANE jONES
ReplyDeleteGood for you! Goes down smooth like water for chocolate...
ReplyDeleteAnd now I'm craving some dark chocolate with a hint of chilies.
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What a tasty magpie, I do hope the extinguisher is filled with Chocolate whipped cream ....or mocha... Must have chocolate daily..one of my drugs of choice, with coffee and potato chips...bkm
ReplyDeleteThis explains why I always use chocolate to help stave off an erupting flare of anger at an editor. I now see it's all connected. Clever, very clever.
ReplyDeleteabsolutely beautiful poem. the words were 'dark manna,' a glorious gathering of subtle enveloping...I especially loved the second stanza. brilliant.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written, I like it!
ReplyDeleteloved your magpie...some very startling imagery and a great close...nicely done!
ReplyDeleteNice piece. Actually, I like my dark chocolate with a glass of red wine! (no pulling of any pins involved, though)
ReplyDeletePick your poison, huh? Nice connection between the vices of the human race.
ReplyDelete"Fire water", "dark manna" great, wonderful images.
ReplyDeleteHelen is right, dark and delicious! I might add dangerous.Nice work poetry Bug!
ReplyDeleteRich and textured - love it!
ReplyDeleteGreat post! Pull the pin! YOW
ReplyDeleteNow I need some hot chocolate laced with cinnamon and chilies
Okay, i personally LOVED the last line!
ReplyDeleteIt was the perfect punchline EVER!!!
All in all, a terrific read!
wow..left me speechless..nicely done!
ReplyDeleteHow the heck did I miss this? Powerful stuff. I very much like the short lines and simple language used to such good effect.
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