Tuesday, July 27, 2010
One Shot Wednesday – Thursday at the Free Store
Thursday at the Free Store
Over-the-Rhine, Cincinnati
"Shut that baby up!"
And the child cries on.
Mary Justevich sings
her raucous song of life
& the child cries.
"The next time you come,
you leave that baby at home."
And in the wounded eyes
of the mother, I see
her cry:
There's no one there
no one there
no one.
January 9, 1986
This poem is part of One Stop Poetry's One Shot Wednesday poetry gathering, where all poets are welcome to share. Make the rounds – it will no doubt be fascinating!
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I M teary too..touched! i feel for that mom..and i know life is mostly unfair,you put it very well! powerful and expressive,brilliant i might add..:)
ReplyDeleteOh, Dana. Oh.
ReplyDeleteoh dang...real and raw...tight.
ReplyDeletethanks for linking up with oneshot!
My heart aches...let's hope the baby can break the cycle of poverty and despair.
ReplyDeleteSo very touching and heartfelt!! Thanks for sharing this...awesome writing. ~ Amanda
ReplyDeleteVivid slice of life in your poetic piece; your lines evoke sympathy through the clear scene. Enjoyed reading it! thanks
ReplyDeleteAwww! Poor baby! and poor Mama!
ReplyDeleteI could see it all so clearly - wonderful poem!
Oh god that was painful and raw
ReplyDeleteReally kudos to you for writing this
It's always the mothers who suffer. I feel for her. :(
ReplyDeleteyou really just put it out there!
ReplyDeletewell done.
as Brian said, "raw."
smiles,
Capsule that captures the raw moment and the back story. I do poetry for fun rather than publication so for this week only, I’ve nervously posted an example from each of my blogs: an Elegy from Scribbles and Diversions, a Gogyohka from Random Twitter Stories, and free verse poem from Random Short Stories.
ReplyDeleteOh, wow! Who's saying, "Shut that baby up!"? (Is it the partner?)
ReplyDeleteWow. Don't you hate to overhear those conversations? I heard one yesterday afternoon - it was just a young woman mouthing off to her boyfriend? husband? - bitching at him, just being nasty for no reason and little tot in the stroller, taking it all in.
Really well expressed. Touches a nerve, that's for sure.
Kat
P.S. Thanks so much for ordering my book! I'm delighted to know you'll have a copy.
sounds like real life to me....
ReplyDeleteEndearingly beautiful, Dana. You know how to express tangible emotion. This is a wonderful poem.
ReplyDeleteThere is such desperation in this piece. It just broke my heart.
ReplyDeletethat was a good one The Bug...
ReplyDeleteand so sad
You really delivered the feeling with this one. One Shots are fun.
ReplyDeleteBrings back memories. Enjoy your blog.Thanks - Bill
ReplyDeleteLife can be cruel to mothers and babies. touching poem.
ReplyDeleteJoanny
Oh dang!! That's heartbreaking...
ReplyDeleteVery sad..but in a few words, you've said it all.. a powerful one shot!
There is that well placed there is no one
ReplyDeleteThis was a great piece for all the mothers out there who are misunderstood
thanks for being part of 1 Shot
been away for a week and catching up..that was raw but so true..so many mothers have been there yet feel so alone..thanks for sharing with One Shot..cheers Pete
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