Tuesday, February 22, 2011

Tattered


Tattered

A flag flutters
in the breeze -
its tattered edges
no better kept
than my
ragged soul.
I could preach
about respect,
but that’s the
conundrum, isn’t it?
What do I know
about reverence?
And so I look away
instead of inside.
Let’s just keep
stirring the pieces
in the box so that
we never have to see
the unbroken picture.

This is a Magpie and a One Shot Wednesday. Please go to those sites to read other excellent writers!

23 comments:

  1. smiles...i like your close...so you never have to see the unbroken picture...seems the conundrum itself as it would seem better than the broken...

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  2. It's always hard to look within, however, I think the bigger picture is one seen better when whole.

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  3. I especially like this one. :))))

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  4. ... or find that there's a piece missing - how dreadful would that be! Love this response to the Magpie prompt, and a great One Shot too.

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  5. i could preach about respect...was the line which striked me most...great close as well..

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  6. 'And so I look away instead of inside', how many times have we each done that? I love this poem, it's gentle, honest strength.

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  7. You are a great poet, my love. You always have been, but lately...wow.

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  8. I enjoyed reading this one.. its good one shot. Specially the ending..



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    Om Namah Shivaya
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  9. nice work. I'm like socks, my favorite line "and so I look away. . ." don't we all do that. love the tone, quiet, reflective. . .

    Monty / bum

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  10. Avoidance ... better to take a peek, no matter how difficult.

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  11. Little, leaves us more ragged than denial. I like this.

    Poetry24…where news is the Muse

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  12. This really captures those uncomfortable moments we have in life. We are still left with the nagging feeling even when we look away. Enjoyed this :)

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  13. Seeing the bigger picture sometimes helps with the missing pieces - in life, as in jigsaws!

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  14. Just beautiful!

    Hugs & love,
    Mimi

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  15. Wonderful - I love stirring the pieces in the box (a form of avoidance) and tattered edges of a ragged soul. So very nicely done!

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  16. Your poetry is even stronger with every poem you write, Dana.

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  17. You and I went down a similar path with this magpie. I really enjoyed your path. I am curious if you will like mine?

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  18. Wow! This one really speaks. It isn't easy to look inward sometimes. Sometimes we'll do just about anything to avoid it.

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  19. holy moly I loved this!
    you brought it on home!

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  20. You know, I recently saw a very tattered American flag, and thought of respect. Nice piece, Bug.

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